Monday 27 January 2014

Descriptive Writing Challenge!




Last week in year 6 we had a lot of fun writing some lovely descriptive writing. We used some awesome alliteration, super similes and some magical metaphors. This weeks writing challenge is for you to come up with a few sentences that really describe the picture above. How many different literary techniques can you use to make your writing as effective as possible? Good luck!

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  1. THIS HAS BEEN WRITTEN AS IF IT WERE MICHAEL WHEN HE WAS STRANDED ON THE ISLAND...
    My eyes suddenly open from their deep sleep, leading to a throbbing headache. The upper part of my body is in the process of burning from the hot, but chalk-white, sand. The lower part is damp from the water, being so near to the sea; I have to peel myself off. The very first things I see are the tufts of candyfloss as they float through the deep, blue sky. My eyes drift along with them, until I see a line of trees.
    The trees are tall, and they tower over me, in a intertwining canopy, guarding the seemingly impenetrable forest. One of them stares at me with its hollow eyes, in a menacing way. They are all lined up, but one of them is dipping into the ocean, causing a slight ripple.
    The ocean. Calm. Tranquil. Ocean. Tropical fishes swim around in the silken, shimmering blue, enjoying their day. They look pretty. A crab scuttles out, hoping to find refuge in the rock-pools nearby. The creatures here are so different to the ones I am used to.
    I can hear the fearful crescendo of the funky gibbons' plaintive hooting and howling. In the background is the faint twittering of exotic birds, and the crash of waves as they slap the surface.

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  2. I really like your use of a range of sentence lengths Pooja! The gibbons also sound as if they are having a whale of a time!

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  3. The cool, transparent, crystal water surrounds a pocket size island just off Japan. As the sea water cruelly smacks the helpless sand,almost every second, palm trees dance to the music of the sea. Washed up on the shore lies a lifeless stone-dead jellyfish, poked and prodded by people who have come then left the island, along with a large feather, which had fallen off the colourful back of a majestic toucan.

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    1. Very nice, Charlotte. I like the way you said that the sea water cruelly slapped the helpless sand!

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    2. star: your beautiful adjectives
      star: good use of similes
      wish: no wish

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  4. It's looks utterly unbelievable, trees are as tall as sky scrapers. The warm sand run through your fingers, the waves are boxers punching the rocks. Metalic colors on the fish that swim by.

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  5. The ocean is as beatiful as a crystal sapphire in the blue sky that holds the swealtering sun shine.The cool warm breeze that blows the white pearly cloud into there swift movment and shape. The sweltering sun shines like golden angels in the
    cerulean sky up above. You can feel the warm and velvety sand pile in the middle OF your toes that make you giggle. You can hear the dame and the trees queen speak to each other by leaves moving . The kingdom of trees circle and guard the sacred wonders of the tropical and equisite island. You can see colourful parrots squaking together in a joyful chorus of majestic gechos and croaking of chamilions together.The snakes hiss like a audiance booing the bad guy when he comes on stage. Swiftly the snake slithers on the dead and rotten leaves of the jungle. There are wisps of the gas fron the mini volcano hidden behind the trees of the jungle forest.

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  6. The waves hitting the rocks,the trees waving side to side.The whales coming out of the water,like if they weren't even there.The gibbon's jumping around the tree's and the birds singing they're way through,fishes jumping out of the water and the sea's sounding like there about to crash!

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  7. The water is as blue as the sky.The trees is a maze, full of leaves and branches.
    The sand grabs your feet as you take a step forwards... The cuddly clouds is as white as snow.

    Angela 6JT

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  8. As I open my eyes my senses come back to normal. The first object I see are the army of trees surrounding, taking power and defending the mystical island. The forest awaits me to discover the secrets there are in the forest of magic. The hot snow of sand pulls me back to the ground. Thankfully, the sea whips my back. I jump. I stand weakly.The world of nature and wildlife surrounds me. The angry sea wakes the sleeping rocks stuck to the ground. I feel the breeze. Disaster strikes. Animal dung and dead animals fills the smell. I FEEL I'M BEING WATCHED...

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    1. I like your short sentences!

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  9. Hi there. I am Anna from 8C NZ. We have had to do some decriptive writing to! I love the way you have written these :)
    From Anna 8C New Zealand

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  10. Hi my name is Francesca fro 8C.
    I really like this post because I like to write stories.
    At the moment in 8C we are writing poems about a special place.
    We have also written a lot of descriptive writing.
    Francesca, 8C

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  11. Hello my name is Francesca.
    This is my favorite blog post because I love to write
    descriptive stories. At the moment in 8C we are writing
    poems about our special place!
    Francesca, 8C

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